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thewhitelily) wrote2007-03-21 12:34 am
thewhitelily) wrote2007-03-21 12:34 am
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The Top Ten Reasons My NaNovel Sucks
The approach of April Fools (another words-in-a-month challenge) has brought me to the rational consideration of my NaNovel, the possibilities of finishing it, and the problems to be overcome if said goal is to be achieved.
So, I present to you: The Top Ten Reasons My NaNovel Sucks
10: There’s remarkably few Sci-Fi-y flourishes. There’s several that are central to the plot, but not nearly enough worldbuilding stuff just… around. I don’t really consider that a flaw, because (like foreshadowing) that’s a part of the editing process, but still.
9: It’s in first person, but really should be in third, which is an editing nightmare to change.
8: My terrorists/freedom fighters flip-flop wildly between being entirely flippant about the whole thing and then way past the point of melodrama. As does my protagonist, now I think about it.
7: I entirely forgot about my Noble Companion and, last the reader hears of him, he’s unconscious in a building under evacuation.
6: I have no antagonist to speak of – just a few isolated petty or backstabbing sadists, the presence of which really doesn’t justify the severity of the protagonist’s actions. I finally managed an antagonist about three quarters of the way through, who does everything short of moustache-twirling in the efforts to get him to be evil enough to bother doing away with.
5: I’ve somehow managed to write a novel with absolutely no dramatic tension, despite the fact that every revelation comes as a complete surprise to the protagonist. How? Well… the revelations come so far out of left field that he’s not expecting anything to be tense about beforehand. And since he’s not actually trying to, you know, achieve anything except satisfy his curiosity…
4: Neither is there any sexual tension, because it turned out my protagonist was too hung up on his ex to fall for the femme fatale. Who also didn’t actually turn out to be all that fatale. Best laid plans, eh?
3: Even the romantic tension, which is intended to be exceedingly subtle, only shows up in three very short scenes with an almost entirely off-screen character.
2: If I could think of another sort of tension, it probably wouldn’t have that either.
1: My protagonist is seriously the most boring person alive. Or, you know, written. Which was kind of intentional, and what was I thinking?
So here’s my decision: I am officially abandoning my NaNovel. Sad, but not entirely unexpected – and I don’t consider it a waste in the least. What an experience of world building and characterisation and plot development and my own capacity to just write, and… wow.
We all had to write the fics we now cringe at to gain the skills to write the fic that’s our latest baby. I had to write Harry Potter and the Promise Ring before I had the skills to write His Son’s Father, and I definitely had to write His Son’s Father before I had anything like the skills to write The Mother of Invention or this crossover I’ve been promising everyone for a year. I’ve looked back on Promise Ring with a wince for years – and I’m just now reached the point where I’m starting to do the same with His Son’s Father. I needed to make the mistakes I’ve made to learn how to make them – to learn how to avoid making them.
Return to Sender was not exactly a misstep along the way, merely my first attempt to fly without the wires that have been holding me up all along. Of course it was filled with mistakes – how could it not be?
I could never have even started in on writing without the support of fanfiction – I simply couldn’t. Fanfiction gave me the framework to start, the framework of characters and a fantasy world that let me reach for the stars and develop a plot and suspense and action and adventure and romance and… to write what was in my heart and my head, bursting to come out, without having to worry about what I’ve always thought of as the hard bit: coming up the framework for the idea. With fanfiction, the framework is just there, and all I need to do is twist a detail or explore some unique possibility.
So what are the lessons I’ve learned from NaNoWriMo? Apart from the simple fact that wow, I really can get it out when I try, they’re too many and too nebulous to put into words. But I think the most important lessons I’ve learned are (not unexpectedly) about original characterisation.
Lesson 1: Protagonist / Point of View Character
My favourite characters in any story are always the normal ones, swept up in events beyond their control. There’s at least one character like that in pretty much every book or movie I’ve loved. They’re also particularly useful characters to have, because they allow easy exposition – the reader sees their expanding world through their eyes, pulling them into the wonder or terror of their new experiences.
I knew all this, so this is where I started with my NaNovel – I had a concept, and I gave the story a main character who was… incredibly normal and moderately content with his place in the strange world I’d created. He had everything he’d cared about stripped away by the ubiquitous evil organisation, and he struck back against the organisation and triumphed.
But all these normal characters had one other thing in common: an agenda. There was one thing they wanted more than life itself, even if they didn’t realise it until the moment of choice came, they took little steps towards it with every breath they took. I knew this component of a protagonist, too, but somehow… somehow, my protagonist ended up without an agenda. Sure, Gary has things taken away from him through the course of the story by the Evil Doers, things that rock his world and make him rethink his perceptions. But he’s indecisive to a painful extent. This was intentional, and turned out to be a strength in the end, but it meant that there was nothing he really felt all that strongly about – and when he saw things wrong with the world, he didn’t really think he could do anything about it or decide to do something about it until the opportunity was thrust upon him. He ended up doing the things he did simply because he had nothing better to do with his time, rather than because it was the deepest desire of his heart to achieve what was on the other side.
Now I’ve pinpointed the exact problem, it should be straightforward to fix, really – give him a bit of a temper, a bit of impulsive insatiable curiosity, and a much healthier dose of cowardice to overcome… or even just acknowledge that this is the case and bring the story to him rather than dragging him around to meet it. Changing his personality would make him less of a foil for his best friend, but would make things easier with the femme fatale as well as introduce a much-needed aspect of tension into his relationship with his love interest. Bringing the story to him would work, but requires a great deal more in the way of cleverness on my part to disguise the coincidences.
Neither is particularly impossible, but nor is either particularly easy.
Lesson 2: Antagonist
This is probably the single biggest problem with my NaNovel. My protagonist could sit in front of the television all day eating Cheezels if I had someone for the reader to hate – to really, really hate. Someone who, in attempting to make the protagonist’s life miserable beyond measure, sows the seeds of his own destruction. Someone in whose end the reader can rejoice, rather than just going “well, that was stupid of him”.
Sure, I’ve got a ubiquitous organisation that does Bad Things – bad enough that when I finally worked out how to destroy them on their own terms I started dancing around yelling “Take that!” But there’s no real Evil, justified or otherwise – and all my attempts to bring it in ended up with melodramatic unsupported and random Evilness or waxing lyrical on how it was a nice idea that just doesn’t work with corrupt and imperfect human beings carrying it out.
I think it would have actually worked out if I’d spent some more time in my antagonists pockets – if I’d actually developed of any kind of personal antagonist short of about a week before finishing and been able to give him a believable reason for acting the way he/his company was… I knew I was in trouble without a decent antagonist, I really did know it - I just had unwarranted faith I'd be able to sort him out and weave him in later, when he came to me.
Urgh. Good antagonists: the bane of any writer’s life.
Lesson 3: Supporting Cast
There wasn’t quite so much wrong with my supporting isn’t so much missing as underdeveloped. I mean, I’ve got some fantastic potential supporting characters – but that’s all they are. Potential. I never leave the viewpoint of my main character, and he simply doesn’t spend enough time with any of them to let them develop a rapport with the reader. When they’re there, they’re too busy spitting out vast swathes of expository dialogue to make any kind of positive impression. The main problem, though, was that I was having enough trouble dragging the main character around after me without any particular motivation to weave in more than a couple of supporting characters with any particular depth.
Actually, there isn’t really all that much to Lesson 3 that couldn’t have been merged into Lesson 2, but hey – with me, two’s just never enough.
The thing is: I could fix all this. I know where I went wrong, and I could fix it all – I could write another fifty thousand words from different viewpoints with their own agendas and subplots, I could cut or rewrite huge swathes of what I’ve written, I could fill out the world to be beautiful and consistent and absorbing and packed with characters who each follow their own path and story, I could give my main character an agenda and a swift kick up the rear end, and I could definitely create tension of some sort from each scene to disconnected scene…
I could also go back and fix some of the worst exposition in His Son’s Father, do a thorough rewrite of the first chapters of The Promise Ring, spend the rest of my life finishing off my AF/HP crossover, and never move forward with my writing career.
Or, I could say “lesson learned” and move on. I could start another story that’s got a main character who’s built around his agenda rather than having it spliced in later, that’s in my chosen genre of fantasy rather than Sci-Fi, where my supporting cast don’t lose their own agendas and storylines in my fight to make my main character behave – and most of all, that has a real antagonist right from the first chapter.
Funnily enough, I’ve got a plot – and a world – in my head, that sounds remarkably like that. Not because I’ve twisted it to fit my new realisations, but when I came back for a look at it I was surprised at how many it fit. It’s been resident in my upper brain space for about three years, but I’ve never written more than a few snatches from it. Theoretically, it’s a prequel to the original story that’s been in my head for about five years – it started out as deep background for that and grew from there into a wonderful deep and complex quest. I’m starting to dream it, I’m starting to daydream it, I’m starting to have proper flashes of it. This is what I must write.
April is approaching fast. I’ll planning to have another attempt at April Fools, only this time I’ll do it because I know I can: and why aim for only fifteen thousand when I know I can write fifty thousand? All I need to do is get my Remix and my Toolbelt article out of the way in the meantime. Easy. *cough*
In other news, since I am officially abandoning my NaNovel, I’m coming good on my promise. Anyone interested in reading 50,000 words of abysmal, inconsistent, entirely unforeshadowed and utterly unpolished first draft, by an author who’s never written a new world or a set of original characters in her life is welcome to ask me for a copy of the document. I refuse to allow myself be ashamed to let people see it the vapid combination of blandness and melodrama that characterises all my first drafts – this is what NaNoWriMo is about, after all: exuberant imperfection, quantity not quality, making mistakes… so that next time around, I can hopefully give it a better go at avoiding them.
With that glowing review of Return to Sender out of the way, anyone who still wants a copy is welcome to let me know. :)
So, I present to you: The Top Ten Reasons My NaNovel Sucks
10: There’s remarkably few Sci-Fi-y flourishes. There’s several that are central to the plot, but not nearly enough worldbuilding stuff just… around. I don’t really consider that a flaw, because (like foreshadowing) that’s a part of the editing process, but still.
9: It’s in first person, but really should be in third, which is an editing nightmare to change.
8: My terrorists/freedom fighters flip-flop wildly between being entirely flippant about the whole thing and then way past the point of melodrama. As does my protagonist, now I think about it.
7: I entirely forgot about my Noble Companion and, last the reader hears of him, he’s unconscious in a building under evacuation.
6: I have no antagonist to speak of – just a few isolated petty or backstabbing sadists, the presence of which really doesn’t justify the severity of the protagonist’s actions. I finally managed an antagonist about three quarters of the way through, who does everything short of moustache-twirling in the efforts to get him to be evil enough to bother doing away with.
5: I’ve somehow managed to write a novel with absolutely no dramatic tension, despite the fact that every revelation comes as a complete surprise to the protagonist. How? Well… the revelations come so far out of left field that he’s not expecting anything to be tense about beforehand. And since he’s not actually trying to, you know, achieve anything except satisfy his curiosity…
4: Neither is there any sexual tension, because it turned out my protagonist was too hung up on his ex to fall for the femme fatale. Who also didn’t actually turn out to be all that fatale. Best laid plans, eh?
3: Even the romantic tension, which is intended to be exceedingly subtle, only shows up in three very short scenes with an almost entirely off-screen character.
2: If I could think of another sort of tension, it probably wouldn’t have that either.
1: My protagonist is seriously the most boring person alive. Or, you know, written. Which was kind of intentional, and what was I thinking?
So here’s my decision: I am officially abandoning my NaNovel. Sad, but not entirely unexpected – and I don’t consider it a waste in the least. What an experience of world building and characterisation and plot development and my own capacity to just write, and… wow.
We all had to write the fics we now cringe at to gain the skills to write the fic that’s our latest baby. I had to write Harry Potter and the Promise Ring before I had the skills to write His Son’s Father, and I definitely had to write His Son’s Father before I had anything like the skills to write The Mother of Invention or this crossover I’ve been promising everyone for a year. I’ve looked back on Promise Ring with a wince for years – and I’m just now reached the point where I’m starting to do the same with His Son’s Father. I needed to make the mistakes I’ve made to learn how to make them – to learn how to avoid making them.
Return to Sender was not exactly a misstep along the way, merely my first attempt to fly without the wires that have been holding me up all along. Of course it was filled with mistakes – how could it not be?
I could never have even started in on writing without the support of fanfiction – I simply couldn’t. Fanfiction gave me the framework to start, the framework of characters and a fantasy world that let me reach for the stars and develop a plot and suspense and action and adventure and romance and… to write what was in my heart and my head, bursting to come out, without having to worry about what I’ve always thought of as the hard bit: coming up the framework for the idea. With fanfiction, the framework is just there, and all I need to do is twist a detail or explore some unique possibility.
So what are the lessons I’ve learned from NaNoWriMo? Apart from the simple fact that wow, I really can get it out when I try, they’re too many and too nebulous to put into words. But I think the most important lessons I’ve learned are (not unexpectedly) about original characterisation.
Lesson 1: Protagonist / Point of View Character
My favourite characters in any story are always the normal ones, swept up in events beyond their control. There’s at least one character like that in pretty much every book or movie I’ve loved. They’re also particularly useful characters to have, because they allow easy exposition – the reader sees their expanding world through their eyes, pulling them into the wonder or terror of their new experiences.
I knew all this, so this is where I started with my NaNovel – I had a concept, and I gave the story a main character who was… incredibly normal and moderately content with his place in the strange world I’d created. He had everything he’d cared about stripped away by the ubiquitous evil organisation, and he struck back against the organisation and triumphed.
But all these normal characters had one other thing in common: an agenda. There was one thing they wanted more than life itself, even if they didn’t realise it until the moment of choice came, they took little steps towards it with every breath they took. I knew this component of a protagonist, too, but somehow… somehow, my protagonist ended up without an agenda. Sure, Gary has things taken away from him through the course of the story by the Evil Doers, things that rock his world and make him rethink his perceptions. But he’s indecisive to a painful extent. This was intentional, and turned out to be a strength in the end, but it meant that there was nothing he really felt all that strongly about – and when he saw things wrong with the world, he didn’t really think he could do anything about it or decide to do something about it until the opportunity was thrust upon him. He ended up doing the things he did simply because he had nothing better to do with his time, rather than because it was the deepest desire of his heart to achieve what was on the other side.
Now I’ve pinpointed the exact problem, it should be straightforward to fix, really – give him a bit of a temper, a bit of impulsive insatiable curiosity, and a much healthier dose of cowardice to overcome… or even just acknowledge that this is the case and bring the story to him rather than dragging him around to meet it. Changing his personality would make him less of a foil for his best friend, but would make things easier with the femme fatale as well as introduce a much-needed aspect of tension into his relationship with his love interest. Bringing the story to him would work, but requires a great deal more in the way of cleverness on my part to disguise the coincidences.
Neither is particularly impossible, but nor is either particularly easy.
Lesson 2: Antagonist
This is probably the single biggest problem with my NaNovel. My protagonist could sit in front of the television all day eating Cheezels if I had someone for the reader to hate – to really, really hate. Someone who, in attempting to make the protagonist’s life miserable beyond measure, sows the seeds of his own destruction. Someone in whose end the reader can rejoice, rather than just going “well, that was stupid of him”.
Sure, I’ve got a ubiquitous organisation that does Bad Things – bad enough that when I finally worked out how to destroy them on their own terms I started dancing around yelling “Take that!” But there’s no real Evil, justified or otherwise – and all my attempts to bring it in ended up with melodramatic unsupported and random Evilness or waxing lyrical on how it was a nice idea that just doesn’t work with corrupt and imperfect human beings carrying it out.
I think it would have actually worked out if I’d spent some more time in my antagonists pockets – if I’d actually developed of any kind of personal antagonist short of about a week before finishing and been able to give him a believable reason for acting the way he/his company was… I knew I was in trouble without a decent antagonist, I really did know it - I just had unwarranted faith I'd be able to sort him out and weave him in later, when he came to me.
Urgh. Good antagonists: the bane of any writer’s life.
Lesson 3: Supporting Cast
There wasn’t quite so much wrong with my supporting isn’t so much missing as underdeveloped. I mean, I’ve got some fantastic potential supporting characters – but that’s all they are. Potential. I never leave the viewpoint of my main character, and he simply doesn’t spend enough time with any of them to let them develop a rapport with the reader. When they’re there, they’re too busy spitting out vast swathes of expository dialogue to make any kind of positive impression. The main problem, though, was that I was having enough trouble dragging the main character around after me without any particular motivation to weave in more than a couple of supporting characters with any particular depth.
Actually, there isn’t really all that much to Lesson 3 that couldn’t have been merged into Lesson 2, but hey – with me, two’s just never enough.
The thing is: I could fix all this. I know where I went wrong, and I could fix it all – I could write another fifty thousand words from different viewpoints with their own agendas and subplots, I could cut or rewrite huge swathes of what I’ve written, I could fill out the world to be beautiful and consistent and absorbing and packed with characters who each follow their own path and story, I could give my main character an agenda and a swift kick up the rear end, and I could definitely create tension of some sort from each scene to disconnected scene…
I could also go back and fix some of the worst exposition in His Son’s Father, do a thorough rewrite of the first chapters of The Promise Ring, spend the rest of my life finishing off my AF/HP crossover, and never move forward with my writing career.
Or, I could say “lesson learned” and move on. I could start another story that’s got a main character who’s built around his agenda rather than having it spliced in later, that’s in my chosen genre of fantasy rather than Sci-Fi, where my supporting cast don’t lose their own agendas and storylines in my fight to make my main character behave – and most of all, that has a real antagonist right from the first chapter.
Funnily enough, I’ve got a plot – and a world – in my head, that sounds remarkably like that. Not because I’ve twisted it to fit my new realisations, but when I came back for a look at it I was surprised at how many it fit. It’s been resident in my upper brain space for about three years, but I’ve never written more than a few snatches from it. Theoretically, it’s a prequel to the original story that’s been in my head for about five years – it started out as deep background for that and grew from there into a wonderful deep and complex quest. I’m starting to dream it, I’m starting to daydream it, I’m starting to have proper flashes of it. This is what I must write.
April is approaching fast. I’ll planning to have another attempt at April Fools, only this time I’ll do it because I know I can: and why aim for only fifteen thousand when I know I can write fifty thousand? All I need to do is get my Remix and my Toolbelt article out of the way in the meantime. Easy. *cough*
In other news, since I am officially abandoning my NaNovel, I’m coming good on my promise. Anyone interested in reading 50,000 words of abysmal, inconsistent, entirely unforeshadowed and utterly unpolished first draft, by an author who’s never written a new world or a set of original characters in her life is welcome to ask me for a copy of the document. I refuse to allow myself be ashamed to let people see it the vapid combination of blandness and melodrama that characterises all my first drafts – this is what NaNoWriMo is about, after all: exuberant imperfection, quantity not quality, making mistakes… so that next time around, I can hopefully give it a better go at avoiding them.
With that glowing review of Return to Sender out of the way, anyone who still wants a copy is welcome to let me know. :)
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Funnily enough, I’ve got a plot – and a world – in my head, that sounds remarkably like that. Not because I’ve twisted it to fit my new realisations, but when I came back for a look at it I was surprised at how many it fit. It’s been resident in my upper brain space for about three years, but I’ve never written more than a few snatches from it. Theoretically, it’s a prequel to the original story that’s been in my head for about five years – it started out as deep background for that and grew from there into a wonderful deep and complex quest. I’m starting to dream it, I’m starting to daydream it, I’m starting to have proper flashes of it. This is what I must write.
Phew. I was loading my guns to try and convince you to take up back your novel and fix it. How foolish of me.:P
Good luck with the next one, and I hope it exceeds your own expectations. :D
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and jumped and squeed and raced for the fanfiction and beaten off about a thousand plot bunnies, I even recognise your icon!)And thanks - I'm sure I'll need all the luck and hope I can get. :)
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Whee, my icon gets recognised! It's a dream come true for every icon maker. :Dno subject
Go on, Elizabeth, you know you want him! *cheers*no subject
...how could I not? :P
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Partay.
In other news, I emailed you, but I'm not sure if you got it - I'm having a party on Saturday night, and you and hubby are enthusiastically invited.
Re: Partay.
Yes! Thanks for the invitation, and I'm sorry for not getting back to you about that - I've been unsucessfully trying to talk Hubby into venturing into the world outside his own living room. Never mind - I'll be there alone, with a nice designated taxi driver to come and pick me up when it's time to go. Anything I should bring along besides a pack of ruskis and myself?
Re: Partay.
Alas, no Hubby? I quite liked him, from our brief, I-was-kind-of-drunk chat. But At least you will be attending, and that deserves a hearty "Huzzah!"
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Haha, that's so damned awesome.
LOL!!
Re: Haha, that's so damned awesome.
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But, yeah. I get that a lot. I look at even stuff I wrote a week ago and I want to just rip it to itty bitty pieces. Like, damnit Alde, you know better than to mix motif fixations until the end!
Namely, Delia!POVs and Alde!doing!grit!noir. And Wallace. *implodes*But, yeah, I understand. Move on, move on. Look back only to poke yourself into never ever ever ever ever doing it again. But it's fun to laugh, da?no subject
And yeah - the inner editor a mixed blessing/curse whenever he's around. I could never write anything without him - I'm an editor a hundred times more than I'm a writer - but there's just too much for him to do and too little of what I've already written that would stay there to make it worthwhile.
*laughs, a little hysterically, because I'm pretty much showing people my internal organs by distributing RtS* *sends anyway*
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See, I'm a writer, but a terrible editor. If the two of us were combined, we'd be like Teh UberAuthor of Doomination.*points out that the best stories tend to be the MRIs anyway, and that internal organs change quite a bit over time, sorta like a smoker's lungs except more fatal*
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Oh, you're totally right - and Teh UberAuthor of Doomination! I like that idea! *squashes random Mary-sue under UberFoot*Erg, but it's not internal organs in a good way. Not like Axiom or something, which shows internal organs through a pretty glass window set into my skin. More like the aftermath of a fatal stabbing, where there's intestines and burst gall bladders and stinky horrible innards spread all over the garbage-strewn alley. :) Lucky I survived the experience, really.
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*would like to point out that she failed the MS test last time she took one, and you would just make it worse, which she views as good thing*Well, I'll know when I read it tonight.
Too late to get Delia out of my head, alas... I got out of that after I tried to draw a beautiful, half dressed woman on my ap calc homework and got a Look from the teacher *headdesk*no subject
Passing/failing the MS test depends on self esteem more than anything else, so... yeah, I probably would make it worse, since I've got a fairly healthy self-esteem. *votes in favour of combining our powers nonetheless, even if it makes us the UberSue, rather than the UberAuthor**tries to block out the horrible concept of people actually reading it*
Ha! This is why I'm glad I can't draw in any way, shape or form. At least none of my distracted doodling is recognisable at a glance as "not what I should be doing". :)no subject
Oh, read it
instead of studying her stupid rocks like a good girl... should be doing that now *facepalm*. Thought it had decent concepts anyhow - though yeah, the characters were none to great, and writing wasn't polished like your usual. But still, hey. It wasn't *bad* to read, by any means. :)no subject
I'd like to read it, if you wouldn't mind. :D
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I'm not sure if I've ever officially got your email address - I've sent it through to your MSN hotmail address, anyway - if you want me to resend to somewhere else that you actually use, let me know. :)
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I would so do it with you if!I!had!time! *falls over*
*misses you severely on MSN and e-mailness*
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Also, were you talking about doing April Fools? The fantastic thing about it is that you get to choose your own target. Not like NaNo, where it's 50K or nothing - April Fools lets you choose your own target anywhere upwards of 500 words, and it's not just work on a single project, either. You're allowed to count school work, work on WIPs, anything you like towards it. :) I'm doing 50K on a single story because I'm [s]unimaginative[/s] hoping for another complete novel.
But in any case, if you don't have the time, you don't have the time! And I know as far as time is concerned, you're probably fairly low on it!
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Oh, I'm not going to tell you want it is yet, but I want to send you something I made *veryveryspecial* for you. And it's not going to work with a photo of it or something, cause you HAVE to have it, and I want your hubby to take a picture of what you look like when you open it (He MUST!!!). So you're going to have to give me your address (and I'm going to poke you about it until I get it, woman!!!! Cause I've already started on it and I WILL NOT TAKE NO FOR AN ANSWER!!!!!! YOU WILL HAVE TANGIBLE EVIDENCE OF MY
WORSHIPFRIENDSHIP!!!!).*wipes sweat from brow*